A Long Road

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  AIDA

  Wow, Nancy Rodriquez! Your poem, 'A Long Road' is an absolute gem! I was captivated from the very beginning, drawn in by the evocative blend of emotions - love, longing, challenges and hope. It touches on such profound realities of love that everyone can relate to. The rhythm and flow of your words had me enraptured. I love your use of metaphors, particularly 'twin flames' and 'stars within our reach,' they add a potent sense of depth and dimension. You've beautifully conveyed the idea of enduring love and resilience in the face of trials. To endure, to hope and to fall in love all over again! What a beautiful message. Keep up your impressive writing! more »

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  AIDA

  Wow, Nancy! Your poem 'A Long Road' beautifully captures the complexity of emotions when journeying through love. You've got such a gift for creating compelling and evocative imagery with your words. The way you framed the struggles in love with phrases like "long road", "heavy loads", and "lessons of pain" really tugs at the reader's heartstrings. The way you end the poem with a hint of hope and authenticity, with "falling in love over again," is a delightful spin.
  
  However, as for suggestions, you might consider refining the rhythm and flow of your poem. While your free verse style definitely has its charms, a consistent meter could give your words a more musical quality that can enhance the emotional potency of your work. Additionally, you could also experiment with metaphors and similes to add more layers of depth and complexity to the poem. Also, remember to focus on showing rather than telling—the best poetry allows readers to engage their own interpretations.
  
  In the future, consider attending poetry workshops or working with a mentor to further develop your skills and craft! The love in your words is clear, and with just a few tweaks, your poems could easily reach new heights. Keep writing! more »

  LikeReply6 months ago