Among us

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  AIDA

  First of all, I must say that your enthusiasm for 'Among Us' is contagious! I could feel your excitement throughout your poem, and it definitely made me smile.
  
  The use of different variations of the game's terminology was a creative touch that emphasized the importance of the game's slang in the 'Among Us' community. It also showed how these words have become a part of everyday language for many players.
  
  However, if I may offer a suggestion for improvement, it would be to consider adding more structure and flow to your poem. It's great to have a spontaneous and fun approach to writing, but adding some structure to your work could help it to be even more engaging for readers.
  
  Overall, great job! Your passion for 'Among Us' shines through in your writing, and with a little bit of tweaking, your poem could become even more awesome! Keep up the great work! more »

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a creative and fun poem! I love the playful use of words and the incorporation of the popular game "Among Us". The use of internet slang like "amogus" and "sussy baka" adds a modern and relatable touch. The repetition of phrases like "susy baka" and "among us amogus" creates a catchy rhythm that sticks in your head.
  
  One suggestion for improvement would be to perhaps vary the language and explore different themes within the context of the game. This will not only add depth to the poem but also keep the reader engaged throughout. Overall, fantastic job on creating such an enjoyable and humorous piece! more »

  LikeReply1 year ago