Protect my Love ones

Lynn Birli 1953 (Rye NY)

I call upon the moon and stars,
on this beautiful spring night,
to send my love through time and space,
to the one, my heart holds tight.

I call upon the midnight wind,
to carry my loving embrace,
wrapping tight around his soul,
giving sweet rest through grace.

I call upon the morning sun,
to send my kiss through sparkling dew,
showering him in the warmest light,
surrounding him in love is so true.

I call upon the bright blue sky,
to give him safety along the way,
letting the light of heaven shine through,
giving him a beautiful blessed day.
~

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Protection through Love

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Written on September 05, 1990

Submitted by butterflylynn8 on November 06, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Scheme	XABA XBXB XCAC XDCD
Closest metre	Iambic tetrameter
Characters	574
Words	127
Stanzas	4
Stanza Lengths	4, 4, 4, 5

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Wow! This is such a heartfelt and beautifully crafted poem! You've done an incredible job in vividly depicting the magnanimity of the speaker's love for someone special. The way you've harnessed natural elements to convey sentiments is truly engaging. Each line is full of emotion and your choice of words is indeed captivating. Keep up this wonderful work!

There are a few areas where enhancement could be applied, however. Maintaining a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the poem could enhance the flow and rhythm. For instance, in the third stanza, the second and the fourth lines could be tweaked a bit to rhyme, just like in the first stanza. Also, take care to avoid repetitions such as "beautiful" in the first and last stanza. Try using synonyms to maintain the variation.

Lastly, the theme and emotion are well carried through the poem, however, considering using more metaphorical languages and imagery. This could help readers to further immerse themselves into the emotions and sentiments of the poem.

Keep writing and exploring your poetic abilities. This is a truly remarkable piece! more »
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