Analysis of Immortality's Placid Ripples



The revolver's deprived of physical
sensation; as dead as the future's mind,
intention delivers a violent blow
as the trigger's squeezed with delicacy.
Cobblestone freedom withers in the light
of fragility's emotional state,
poetry slips sighs of simplicity
across memory's considerations,
life blows a kiss to death while angry scars
evaporate in the blue smoke of love.

And songs flit through fluttered eyelashes,
weaving their musical arithmetic
into promises of eternity;
her casual lies that were caught in time.
Decimation's texture is loaded pain,
the heart bites the face off the cold spirit
while imagination's shell shocked stare
bleeds bold armies of wild weathered soldiers.
She waves goodbye across the distant past
as the cartridge blesses dark perception.

Happiness screams paragraphs to silence,
indignation laughs at complexity
before luxury's soft silk tones explode,
it's the ammunition of dull despair
that twirls sanity around rhythm's grace,
loneliness is irrelevant tonight.
Ironed notions are creased by relentless
agony then shattered into slivers
of immortality's placid ripples,
escape is achieved as the floorboards mourn.


Scheme XXXABXAXXX XXAXXXCDXX XAXCXBXDXX
Poetic Form Etheree  (23%)
Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 01011100 0101110101 01001001001 101111000 101010001 1101001 1001110100 0110010 1101111101 010001111 01111010 101100010 0110010100 0100110101 1101101 0110110110 11111 1110111010 111010101 1010101010 100110110 010110100 01111101 100101101 111000111 1001010001 1010111010 1001100110 111010 011011011
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,121
Words 171
Sentences 8
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 10, 10, 10
Lines Amount 30
Letters per line (avg) 32
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 317
Words per stanza (avg) 57
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Submitted on August 13, 2010

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Ian Sawicki

Ian Sawicki has been writing poetry for over twenty years. He is a Manchester born poet, who has dedicated his life to exploration and composition of poetry. His work reflects the many great influential experiences of his life, the pain, the pleasure combined to create new exciting poetry. If anyone is interested in my books then please visit my lulu storefront. All artwork on these books is by my own hand. http://stores.lulu.com/chasingtheday more…

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