Analysis of 16 and make up



The light in your eyes grows dim every day...

Cus you got to stop and listen to what they have to say

their opinion mattered....

your hopes were shattered

Your dreams have scattered...

To a godforsaken place

And its the only way to save face...

And your life is burning up at an alarming rate.

You sit and blame it all to fate..

Can you see the fire before the ashes?

You can't even see past your perfect eyelashes....

with make up on.... your dreams won't drown

The next line....will make it fine

One more puff...will be enough

To light you way

At least for one more day...

Made with total disrespect

those marks upon your neck,

Paint a gloomy image of your past.

And with the lies you were told

they helped to mold,

The women whose tears fall fast

You need him..to forgive your sins.

Your life is lost

'cus of the higher cost

so you keep on the deceiving

The people who look out for you...

The people who strive to...

Make sure the light in your eyes

Stays bright not dim...

And all cus of him?

A sorry excuse of a pimp?

Fuck that and him!

And now your lips touch bottle

After this shot it's on, Full throttle!

Its really fine... he's twenty-nine

Its ok that at sixteen... you're just a fiend

as if, you're far from home... and you're all grown....

Shouldn't be that way....

You shouldn't have to dread another day...

And after all you've been through

Still these words won't reach you...

Cus with your make up on

And the bottle gone

those marks upon your neck

make you feel you have respect....

And that's enough for you it seems

While I sit wondering why your light grows dim


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Poetic Form
Metre 01011111001 11111010111111 101010 11010 11110 1011 010101111 0111101110101 11011111 11101001010 11101110110 11111111 011111 111101 1111 111111 111001 110111 101010111 0101101 1111 0101111 1110111 1111 110101 11110010 01011111 010111 1101011 1111 01111 01001101 1101 0111110 101111110 11011101 11111011101 1111110111 10111 1101110101 0101111 111111 111111 00101 110111 1111101 01011111 11110011111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,624
Words 327
Sentences 32
Stanzas 48
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 48
Letters per line (avg) 25
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 25
Words per stanza (avg) 6
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Submitted on April 18, 2020

Modified on March 15, 2023

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