Analysis of Patience



I saw you once sitting alone in that coffee shop
A moment of silence that made all things stop
I looked at you the way I'll get lost in a galaxy
It's more than enough than what I call - fantasy

I was waiting for my turn to place my order
Dreaming I can stay in this moment forever
I just can't remember the drink that I often buy
I felt like I already died when you passed by

I had the urge to follow you and ask your name
But you vanished so fast like that bullet train
I was left there standing in such a big disappointment
Like a prominent period in an incomplete statement

A century of broken hopes had gone in a blink
Paired with unexplainable sadness that will slowly sink
It's been 50 years since I set my eyes on you
Where you left a riddle in my heart without a clue

Stopping by at this place had been the highlight of my day
Hoping I could see you and maybe say - Hey!
I'll go home not getting my most awaited opportunity
My one and only chance to free myself, emotionally

I wish I could go back and erase that exact incident
So my whole existence can now be different
But I can't change it no matter what I do
So I'll drown myself with caffeine as I wait for you.


Scheme AABB CCDD XXEE FFGG HHBB EEGG
Poetic Form Quatrain  (83%)
Metre 1111100101101 01011011111 11110111100100 111011111100 111011111110 101110110010 1110100111101 111101011111 110111010111 11101111101 1111100101010 101001000100110 0100110111001 1101001011101 1111111111 1110100110101 1011111101111 10111101011 111110110100100 1101011110100 111111001101100 111010111100 11111110111 111110111111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,202
Words 265
Sentences 3
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 39
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 154
Words per stanza (avg) 40

About this poem

This poem depicts a person's endless waiting. A pursuit of a dream love's happy ending while being oblivious of its nonexistent beginning.

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Written on November 15, 2023

Submitted by FLi on November 14, 2023

1:21 min read
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Francelle Ortega

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