Analysis of Moments



In that moment crossed my mind, a tale I once read,
of an invisible string, made of thin red thread
It tied around the pinkies of two destined souls,
meant to be together, until grey and old
It never broke, nor untied, steady it held
It knotted and pulled, yet never compelled

I once remembered of your name written,
in scriptures and stories on papers, bitten
There it reads, in brightness so clear
your title, your honour, a tile of tears
Surrounded by diamonds, an expensive chandelier
Loud heartbeats whisper, thats all we hear

The light of moon was poured in the sea
The beauty of your heart, that’s all I could see
And if my mind forgets, my heart won’t be at ease,
I will love you with my soul, that is my peace

Those moments I wished to share with you
Those moments of light that turned to blue
Those moments I struggled to speak to you
Those moments I wished you had just knew
I wept in those moments but you did not see
I dreamt under stars, to plant with you, a rose tree
I slept not a wink, not an hour, nor degree
I stepped in your vision, one two three
times had your face never left my mind
I would smile at you, but you would stare blind

Although it hurt for me to say,
He’s kind, he’s busy, he’s smart, it’s okay
I wish I had some courage in me,
to walk up to you and say exactly what I see
But my heart would run away and I could barely speak,
I was scared to screw up, yes I was too weak

I remember that day like it was yesterday,
The day we spoke like life wasn’t in the way
A clear road of busyness yet no one was there,
It was just me, you and your perfect hair
It felt as though we’ve always known each other
I felt as though that moment was forever

Moments I dream of long walks in the rain, under red umbrellas, and silver chains
Your black rings and my gold ones too,
unrusted and perfect, we’d wear them through
Moments where I’d smile by just staring at your face,
I promise I wasn’t weird, I simply wanted to know your heart and it’s pace
I wanted to be your friend, not chase,
yet my heart was set out, and continued to race

Until the stars fade away, and the planets collide
Until the sun doesn’t set and the oceans are dried
Until then, for you, I will always wish
Until the end, with you, every moment I want to cherish


Scheme AAXXBB CCDXDX EEXX FFFFEEEEGG HHEEII HHJJKK XFFLLLL MMNN
Poetic Form
Metre 011011101111 110100111111 11010111101 11101001101 11011011011 1100111001 1101011110 01001011010 11101011 110110111 0101101010001 11101111 011111001 01011111111 011101111111 11111111111 110111111 110111111 1101101111 110111111 11011011111 111011111011 111011110101 110110111 111110111 1111111111 1111111 111101111 111111001 1111101010111 1111101011101 11111111111 10101111110 0111111001 0111111111 1111101011 1111111110 11111101010 10111110011010100101 11101111 10011111 101111110111 110111110101111011 110111111 111111001011 0101101001001 010111001011 011111111 0101111001011110
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 2,291
Words 467
Sentences 1
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 6, 6, 4, 10, 6, 6, 7, 4
Lines Amount 49
Letters per line (avg) 36
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 218
Words per stanza (avg) 56

About this poem

I wrote this in a couple days and it was partially my creative imagination, but also from my heart. I was inspired by someone who I really admired.

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Written on June 10, 2023

Submitted by ncitykey on September 15, 2023

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N Citykey

I’m 16 but will be 17 in December 2023. Currently in my last year of high school. I am born and raised in Toronto, but ethnically Indian. I started writing poetry around the age of 8, but got more into it at the start of high school. more…

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