Analysis of Your kids are dying



Your kids are dying

What if I didn’t exist?
What if I was somebody else?
What if I was something else?
What if I didn’t have a name?
What if my brain was dried out?
Who and what can suck my blood out?
Who am I asking?

I could just drown for a minute
I have a crown, you said
I am eternal, you said
I am exceptional, you said
I am indelible, you said
I am incredible, you said
Senescence, my greens?

Feel, Feel, Feel, Feel, Feel
Love, Love, Love, Love, Love
Why different kinds?
Inevitable and unbreakable
Breathe, Breathe, Breathe, Breathe
Dream, Dream, Dream,  Dream
Why these shearing paths?
“life is like….”
“If I could just disappear”
“If I could just forget”
“If I could just be numb”
“If I could just be empty”
I’ve heard that before, anthems.

Your kids are breathing haze
Your kids are searching for you
Your kids are veining out
Your kids are questioning your existence
Your kids are questioning their existence
Your kids want to be inhuman.

Take out the humanity in me and I will live.


Scheme A XBBXCCA XDDDDDX XXXXXXXXXXXXX XXCEEX X
Poetic Form
Metre 11110 111101 1111101 1111101 1111101 1111111 10111111 11110 11111010 110111 1101011 11010011 11010011 11010011 01011 11111 11111 11001 0100000100 1111 1111 11101 111 111101 111101 111111 1111110 1110110 111101 1111011 11111 1111001010 1111001010 11111010 1100100010111
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,028
Words 204
Sentences 14
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 1, 7, 7, 13, 6, 1
Lines Amount 35
Letters per line (avg) 22
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 127
Words per stanza (avg) 31

About this poem

This poem is simple and about the observed high suicide rate within the youth and depression. It's about crying out to the creator of life.

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Written on July 23, 2022

Submitted by mabuyakhululindo on August 20, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Hlengiwe Mabuyakhulu

20 years of age Born and raised in a small town Currently a student I love writing and reading more…

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