Analysis of Forbidden
How can I exist in the same world as that brightness?
When my nights and days are so dark.
There's more to me than what they see,
I’m nothing but a pretender wearing a mask.
Without it I’m nameless and faceless,
no identity at all,
to the one who matters most.
If only she knew what I felt inside,
how my knees got weak when she passes me and with just a slight glance she would make my heart melt.
How do I even begin to explain that smile and how it shines bright like the sun!
If only I was worthy enough to be in "her world" I would find a way to tell her one day,
but on the other side of the divided middle line in "our worlds" it just doesn't make sense.
Which brings me back to my original question: how can I exist in the same world as that brightness?!
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Poetic Form | |
Metre | 1110100111110 11101111 11111111 110100101001 011110010 1010011 1011101 1101111101 1111111101011011111111 11110011011101111101 110111001110011110111011 110101100101010101111011 1111110100101110100111110 |
Closest metre | Iambic heptameter |
Characters | 781 |
Words | 180 |
Sentences | 9 |
Stanzas | 13 |
Stanza Lengths | 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1 |
Lines Amount | 13 |
Letters per line (avg) | 45 |
Words per line (avg) | 12 |
Letters per stanza (avg) | 45 |
Words per stanza (avg) | 12 |
About this poem
This is a poem I wrote during my senior year in high school in my creative writing class. The assignment was to take one line from True Love by Robert Penn Warren and create my own poem. I came up with the concept of a man admiring a forbidden love from afar.
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Written on April 01, 2008
Submitted by Quiles2010 on January 30, 2022
Modified by Quiles2010 on January 30, 2022
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