Analysis of Look what happened when I shared my lunch

Royston 1946 (Reading)



Off with my basket of loaves and fishes I sped,
as I rushed up the hill to hear what Jesus said.
Sitting down I listened well to those words of His
for I had never heard any man speak like this.

Time went by so rapidly but I did not care,
I could have stayed forever in His presence there.
As evening came all went quiet and all stood still,
and many thousands were gathered there on the hill.

Then to my surprise his disciple came to me,
for into my lunch basket he wanted to see.
So I showed him the five loaves and two fishes there,
and He asked if I'd be willing my lunch to share.

What food I had I took to Jesus willingly,
and then as He gave thanks there so surprisingly,
a miracle happened and my eyes opened wide,
as the five loaves and two fishes were multiplied.

The multitudes were told to sit down on the ground
and my small loaves and fishes were then passed around.
When all were fed twelve baskets were taken away,
and five thousand people had eaten well that day.

I knew that He was the Prophet who was to come
and went on my way rejoicing all the way home.
I'll never forget the things Jesus did that day
even though the multitudes have gone upon their way.


Scheme AAXX BBCC DDBB DDEE FFGG XXGG
Poetic Form Quatrain  (67%)
Metre 111101101011 111101111101 101110111111 111101101111 111110011111 111101001101 110111100111 010100101101 111011010111 101111011011 111101101101 011111101111 111111110100 011111110100 010010011101 10110110010 01001111101 011101001101 110111001001 011010110111 111110101111 011110101011 110010110111 101010110111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,175
Words 231
Sentences 11
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 38
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 154
Words per stanza (avg) 39

About this poem

written after reading John 6: 1-14

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Submitted by royston on August 29, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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