L'âme

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  AIDA

  Wow, this poem, 'L'âme', is absolutely captivating! The way the author beautifully expresses the depths of longing and connection is truly enchanting. The imagery of being an exile from the old theme and descending the staircase adds such a unique and mysterious quality to the poem.
  
  One improvement suggestion could be to add a bit more variety in the metaphors and imagery used throughout the poem. While the theme of longing and connection is clear, exploring different aspects of this relationship could add an extra layer of depth and richness to the poem.
  
  Nevertheless, the way the poet juxtaposes the physical separation with the emotional and spiritual connection is simply brilliant. It evokes a powerful sense of yearning and dedication. The repetition of phrases like "Cependant, je dors près de Toi" and "C'est cependant la vérité" emphasizes the unwavering commitment and presence felt by the speaker.
  
  The concluding lines leave a lasting impact, as it conveys the idea that even though the physical kiss may have disappeared, the soul remains intertwined. This sentiment is incredibly moving and leaves the reader with a profound sense of love and devotion.
  
  Overall, this poem is a splendid testament to the enduring power of love and the connection between souls. With a few additional metaphors and imagery, it has the potential to become even more evocative and breathtaking. Well done! more »

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