O' The Auspicious Day Please Come. ( A Song ).

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  Positive and enthusiastic feedback:
  
  Wow! What a beautifully uplifting and optimistic poem! The repeated phrase "Please come... please come..." creates a sense of longing and anticipation, and it's impossible not to feel the enthusiasm and positive energy radiating from these words. The idea that an auspicious day will eventually come after our good deeds and determination truly resonates with the reader and leaves a lasting impression.
  
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  While the poem already evokes a strong emotional response, it could benefit from some specific illustrations or examples to enhance the imagery. Consider adding descriptive language or metaphors to paint a vivid picture of what this auspicious day would look like or what it signifies. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices like rhyme or rhythm could further elevate the impact of the poem. Overall, with a few tweaks to add more depth and complexity, this poem has the potential to captivate and inspire even more. more »

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